Distance, Number 1

Jason

We moved to Et C 2 from Jupiter Prime shortly after my fifteenth birthday. It was not a decision I’d had any say in. My parents had just come home from work one day and announced it, as if they were announcing dinner plans, or something. As usual, I didn’t rate an opinion.

I had lived my whole life on Prime—or as near as I could remember, anyway—and moving to some rock 20 light years away wasn’t high on my list of things to do. I’d been on other rocks before—Europa, Ganymede, Earth even, once—and I didn’t like it. Earth especially. So damned bright, and everything so heavy . . . . And the air . . . I just could not get used to the smell of it. No, I was a station kid, and I never wanted to leave.

We argued that night. I mean, we’d had some fights before, but that night . . . . I’d have run away, but on a space station, where’re you going to run to? Best I could do was smash a lamp, tell them both to fuck off, and storm out.

Not that it did any good. I mean, it never did any good. They did whatever the hell they wanted to, and I was left to make what I could of it.

Well, I didn’t help them pack. I spent most of those two weeks in the twilight of the observation deck, leaning over a railing, staring out at that beautiful orange disc. Jupiter . . . I don’t think there is anything more beautiful in the universe. Subtle shades of orange and beige, glowing softly in the dim light of the Sun, eddying and spinning and twisting into and over each other, dancing slowly back and forth over months; and a glittering fabric of stars behind. And when the light and the station’s orbit are just right, there’s the faintest shimmer of a ring around the equator. It seems I’d spent most of my life on that deck, sometimes with a telescope, sometimes with a book; always with a lot of time on my hands.

Those two weeks went by way too fast, and it was all I could do to burn the image of that sky into my mind, so that I’d have something to cling to when even Sol itself was just a tiny speck in the night. Before I knew it, I was standing on the jump shuttle platform beside the shipping crate that held all our stuff. The whole of the station staff had turned out to see Mom and Dad off. Probably couldn’t wait to call dibs on their offices. But Mom and Dad were happily chatting everyone up. And I couldn’t think of anything better to do than just stand there and wait.

The shuttle ride to the jump gate took only a few hours. Mom and Dad spent the time absorbed with each other, as usual. I ignored them, and went to the back to watch Jupiter—my home—slip further and further into the black expanse, until it was just a bright light in the night.

35 Responses to “Distance, Number 1”

  1. Hey Gaffer — thanks for your vote.  :-)  I’ve been debating for a while just axing the opening section.  It was my way in to the story, but it is so different in tone, and, as I think you alluded to, rather weak writing . . . maybe the story would work better without it.  And I think that confusion of tone is one of the problems I’ve had figuring out where to go next. 

    What do you think — would it have it have worked better for you if it just started at part 2?  Thanks!

  2. ShadowKat says:

    keep going! but because I’m more of a werwolf fan, I think that Winter Rain takes priority. lol

  3. ShadowKat says:

    I wouldn’t scrap this part altogether. if you do decide that you don’t like it as the opening to the story, I’d say keep it on as a flashback or something. I do like it though.

  4. Hi ShadowKat — Thanks for your comment.  :-)  Don’t worry — if I do pick up Distance again, it will be once a week, at most.

    And it’s just the very opening section (the backstory) that I’m considering cutting — not all of this chapter.  I think parts 2-4 work as well as I can make them.  Just part 1 doesn’t seem to fit that well.

  5. Shaw says:

    Very much enjoy what there is of Distance.  Am looking forward to more, eventually.  Am aware though, that everybody has finite reserves of time and energy.  Therefore won’t be tragically disappointed if eventually takes a good long while.

  6. Good to know.  I still haven’t come up with much, but at least I’m thinking about it again.  Thanks for commenting!

  7. Khamsin says:

    I would very much like to see more of this tale as well. But as others have said, if I have to wait a long time, well . . . I’m patient!

  8. Nisp says:

    i don’t like sci-fi. something about space travel and lasery things puts me off. sci-fi writers (well, the ones who have scarred me for life at least) tend to immediately go way over my head with tech-talk and latin names, blithely anticipating me to either follow their whizzing around or go on a frenzied google search for weird non-existent things. i’m too old to do that anymore . . . 

    here, you do none of that and i am grateful. i can immediately identify with this kid who sees the world around him in plain language – just as we view our own world. and it ends just as i was getting comfortable :P

    what is this strange disease on what is apparently a paradise planet? is it as much a paradise as is advertised? what makes some people survive? what would happen if the drug suddenly became unavailable? would his parents try change everything there with money? could his mother’s indiscretion cause further trouble along the way – something even their double pay can’t make disappear? hmmm . . . i definitely want to know much more . . . 

  9. I have asked Gail to do some artwork for Distance, in hopes it will spur me to start writing it again.  I actually have answers to most of those questions, if I can just find the courage to write the damned thing.

    Thanks for reading and commenting.  :-)

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