Winter Rain, part 49

18 Responses to “Winter Rain, part 49”

  1. Nisp says:

    I am so glad I left reading this for a week . . . now i got a whole fresh batch of chapters to read.

    the puppy thing was obvious enough to me a little while back – not sure if you re-wrote anything there before i read it or not.
    the morning flipping to dusk here sat just fine with me too. i’ve had the same words pop into my head walking into pubs in the late morning – not that i do that often, you understand, but . . . ahem.

    tiergan is so obviously not used to being in charge here and being around one of Druggan’s family clearly has him on edge. one leadership challenge after the other . . . i think he’s going to manage this one just fine – by the skin of his um teeth, but i can’t wait to see how he grows into himself.

    Brennan, for all his lack of words, is a solid looming presence. he makes me want to cheer for tiergan all the more.

    Keely is so seemingly innocent, but i get the feeling she can be a real bitch in a fight! those yokels had better watch out . . . .

    and on the tension score – tension is great, but change of pace keeps the unexpected that much more thrilling i think. a lull can work – but even if this is a lull, the threat of violence (brennan’s scowling and the locals’ muttering) keeps my heart pounding . . . like that moment after you’ve switched the horror movie off and have to slowly push your dark bedroom door open . . . 

  2. Hi NiSP — Cool.  Thanks for all the detailed feedback.  :-)

  3. Kitty says:

    “Then I’ll have the fish stew and a Coke!”

    Breakfast of abominations!  Er . . . I mean champions! 

    I didn’t find the dusk allusion confusing but then, er . . . I know from long experience that I tend to “get” your writing without any problem, so it’s probably a personal thing.

    What exactly that says about me, I don’t know :P

    Hmmm . . . something interesting gonna happen in the next installment, just maaaaybe?  I dunno where I get that idea.

  4. Well, you are also getting it 3 months after it was written — and after I have edited out the problems everyone else had.  ;-)

  5. Kitty says:

    No fair editing! :O

  6. Showeda says:

    Thank goodness for your last comment . . . I thought this writing was spot on . . . As I was reading the comments, began feeling dumber than usual . . . Tiergan is growing into his role . . . Changing of tables, seating plan, sharing focus with Keely . . . All marvellous stuff . . . And I don’t know if this is OK to say this . . . But I’m liking Brennan . . . He’s like a Driving Examiner, ready to do an ‘emergency stop’ . . . But very loyal to principal of ‘second’ . . . BTW I think I forgot to comment on ‘pup’ page . . . Excellent, totally got that too . . . I like the human/wolf technology of self heal . . . I really feel like that myself, having a good delve, so to speak . . . I’m also liking how Tiergan uses his physical ‘pain’, so directly . . . To keep cool, focused, strong . . . Humans could learn heaps about staying with at least some ‘pain’ . . . BTW, I think I’m liking you too . . . 

  7. Showeda says:

    Don’t get scared . . . I don’t know where you live . . . And those stalker convictions were unfounded and now nearly ‘spent’ anyway . . . Erm, may be it’s too soon to give you extracts from my weird sense of humour . . . ( I don’t stalk and I’ve never been convicted of anything..So far :)

  8. Well, I’m pretty sure there is an ocean between us, so I’ll sleep easily tonight.  ;-)

    And look — it’s another installment I like the writing in.  I’ve just added this page to my link toolbar as “READ THIS BEFORE WRITING” — this is what WR should be sounding like.  Chapter 7 sucked.  Hopefully, with these reference points, Chapter 8 won’t.  :-)

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