Winter Rain, part 46

20 Responses to “Winter Rain, part 46”

  1. Thanks, everyone, for your patience and encouragement, waiting for this installment.  It should be back to normal schedule this week.  There are maybe one or two parts left in Chapter 4, and I’ll start planning ahead for Chapter 5, so there won’t be the usual gap. 

    Tangents was a limited success.  I’ll try to decide before next Saturday whether or not to continue them.

  2. Vercin says:

    I was really disappointed by this installment.

    After all the angst, I expected it to suck, hard. frown Try to do worse next time when you bother with the big long lead-up ;) The only thing confusing me was Tiergan’s expectation of an attack . . . I can’t see any sort of reaction on his part that would invite attack because a puppy growled. I don’t understand what he “didn’t realize”.

    Re: tangents . . . I don’t know your full metric for success, but if “reader enjoyment” is on the list, I hope you maxxed that part out. I thoroughly enjoyed the snapshot—it helped flesh out the world, and gave you the opportunity to address things you can’t easily do in the main flow of the story.

    P.S. “I look up to Dugan’s mate with huge smile on my face.” ?

  3. Hi Vercin — I shall try to make it suck harder next time.  ;-)  Actually, I deleted all of the original text.  This whole scene was written in the last 24 hours — the way it should have been. 

    I think I have to come to an important conclusion about writer’s block: it has little to do with the writing.  Probably an obvious point, but not so to me until the last few days.  It wasn’t that I was unable to fix the problems, it was that I was unwilling to.

    Thanks for the feedback on Tangents.  I was basing “success” on readership numbers and comments.  For the first month, readership was less than a third of the WR audience.  It’s up to about two thirds, now, I think.  I’m wondering if that means people don’t want to read short stories in pieces.  That said, I put more stake in the opinions of people who actually comment, so your vote will weigh considerably in my decision.  :-)

  4. Oh, and on the point of his reaction — certain things are off-limits.  Violently off-limits.  Like a strange adult (male, especially) wolf being around one’s very young pups.  Tiergan mistakes Morey’s small size for that off-limits age and fears the worst will happen.

  5. On the other hand, you can cheer up now — it sucked harder than you thought it did.  ;-)

  6. Vercin says:

    While that’s well-considered and sounds sensible, I don’t think there’s any reasonable way the reader will know all that the way it’s presented, unless I really missed something earlier. If you allow rewrites or clarifications, that would be a very good candidate.

    “Our eyes connect and he realizes his mistake” perhaps replace “his mistake” with “I’m no relative” or some such, and at the end of the paragraph, something about a well-founded reason young pups are kept away from other packs on pain of death. Anything that explains Tiergan’s “see cute lil puppy” —> “OMG I’M GONNA DIEEEEE!”

  7. I’ve made a few changes — hopefully it will clear things up.

  8. srsuleski says:

    I just read it and was quite confused, myself.  After they talked about him being a yearling I kind of guessed, but still since Tiergan had been welcome it would be their own fault to let a puppy near him (“Welcome to our home!  Beware of puppies!”) and I’d wonder what they hell they expected would happen, if they did indeed go apeshit on him.  Perhaps Tiergan’s too in the moment to think that through, though.

  9. srsuleski says:

    Oh, and I’m inferring from this that these creatures are born into wolf form and acquire the ability to take on human form.  (I’m getting an image of a human mother birthing a puppy and then trying to scrub it from my mind — which leads me to wonder if the mother has to be in wolf form the entire time she’s pregnant?  What happens before she knows she’s pregnant?  Wouldn’t changing in that time kill it? Questions . . . questions . . . )

    Also, seems like Tiergan wants to be a daddy.

  10. They are born in wolf form, to a wolf parent.  The ability to change comes later.  As for what happens during the pregnancy, I have some ideas, but I’m not setting anything in stone, at this point.  ;-)

    And you see, when I said I needed a few days for world-building, it all seemed so legitimate.  In future, I’ll just make decisions on the fly and hope for the best.  Grrr.

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