Winter Rain, part 58

I wake with a start to motion and blinding sunshine. I squeeze my eyes shut to block out the light, but the dream stabs at me from the backs of my eyelids, and I snap them open again. My shirt is damp with sweat, and I start to shiver, despite the warmth of the sun through the windscreen.

“You’re turning where that car is coming out,” Keely says hurriedly, pointing past me from the back seat. Brennan just nods and continues driving.

I arch forward in my seat, to separate my shirt from my back, but it clings stubbornly. I reach back and pull it away.

“Have a good nap?” Keely asks. I can hear the smirk in her voice even before I turn to see it.

I shrug, and run my hand up past my forehead. Even my hair feels damp.

“How long did I sleep?”

“Uh, maybe a couple of minutes?”

Really. Felt like longer.

The image flashes again, across my eyelids as I blink—him, the older me, standing over her. I clench my teeth and pull away.

“Are you feeling okay?” she asks, a hint of worry in her voice. “You look like you’ve seen a ghost or something.”

“I’m fine,” I reply, and shake my head. “Probably just woke up too quickly.” I try to laugh, but it doesn’t quite come out right.

“Maybe you should go back to sleep for a while. It’s most of an hour before we get there.”

I shake my head again, but don’t meet her eyes. “No. I’ve slept enough.

“Were we talking about something?” I ask, more for the distraction than because I care.

She goes silent, but I can feel her eyes on me still.

“You’re sure you’re okay?” she asks again, doubtfully.

“Yes!” I growl emphatically. “For fuck’s sake, I’m fine! Will you leave it alone!”

I regret my tone almost before the words are out of my mouth. Brennan turns to look at me, and I hear Keely drop back into her seat behind him.

Nice job, Tiergan. Nice fucking job.

I crane around in my seat to apologize, but she’s staring out the window, her jaw set.

“Keely . . . I’m sorry. That didn’t come out the way . . . . ”

She doesn’t respond.

“You were right—I’m not feeling quite myself, just now. I didn’t mean to take it out on you. I’m sorry.”

She nods once, but doesn’t turn back.

I wait another moment, then resettle myself in my seat. I’ll just have to give her some time—I’ve got nobody to blame but me, anyway. Brennan shakes his head at me slowly, a look of . . . something—contempt? disappointment?—on his face, then returns to his driving.

Yeah, well, whatever, Brennan. If that’s who you want me to be, I’m happy to disappoint you.

The cabin goes silent, except for the purr of the engine and the hum of the tires against the road.

18 Responses to “Winter Rain, part 58”

  1. W Grimm says:

    I can see what you mean, not saying it’s horribly written or progressed, but the all too familiar feeling of trying to shove a square peg through a circular hole is evident.
    Not ever portion of a story has to be enticing or ‘productive.’

    In any event I enjoyed it for the feeling of his anxiety in the dream coming to light.

    As a note: When I find myself frustrating through an uncooperative segment I keep a nice big bottle of rum next to me to alleviate the stress. ^_^

  2. I prefer Jameson — perhaps I will try it, next time.  :-)

  3. Katrin says:

    When I can’t write, and see myself trying real hard, and when I than, finally, notice that I try too hard, I dothis:

    I sit down and tell myself how happy I am for noticing.
    Thn I make a plan:
    First I shut down my PC.
    Second: I pack myself in my warmest jacket.
    Third I go for a walk, a long one, and let the wind pull at my hair. I give all that frustration to the wind. Because I most often write late in the evening, I don’t have to deal with lots of pedestians, so I can yell at the night sky . . . 
    (Fourth) When the frustration is dealt with, I go home and paint. I put all that is in me, all the turmoil, on the paper. (These pictures are not supposed to look “nice”.)
    (Fifth) When it is all on the paper, I don’t have to carry it any more. I file the picture away, and start with a new document, an empty page, write again.

    Sometimes it is enough, sometimes I need to take a day more (or two) and not worry about writing, do something nice for the child within: Rent a stupid movie, go to the aquarium, listen to nurturing music.

    I don’t know WHY I wanted to share this, but here it is anyway . . . 

    Wish you all the support and patience you need.
    I will sertenly be here to read your output.

    Good night

    Katrin

  4. Hey Katrin,

    Thanks for that.  :-)  I’m getting the impression I get angrier at myself for missing my deadlines than you guys do.  As a result, I’m trying to take it a bit easier on myself when the writing just doesn’t come together (as it hasn’t been a lot, lately). 

    In any event, I’m doing some programming this morning, instead.  Apart from getting to feel I’ve accomplished something, I think a little distance from the writing is what I need today. 

    Thanks to you and everyone else for your support and for continuing to read the story.  It means a lot to me.

    Chris.

  5. lethe says:

    “You’re sure you’re okay?” she asks again, doubtfully.

    “Yes!” I growl emphatically.  “For fuck’s sake, I’m fine!  Will you leave it alone!”

    Your dialogue is pitch-perfect Chris.  Stop being so hard on yourself.  Self-criticism is worthwhile to a point but after that it just becomes a burden to the creative process.  Forget about the schedule and write.  Writers (all artists) need space.  Give yourself the space to create and you will create amazing things.  There may be an audience waiting but nobody’s going anywhere.  Your fiction is good enough to keep people waiting a long, long time.  You capture emotion in dialogue beautifully and your pacing is just right.

    Chris

  6. Krest says:

    An rss feed goes a long way, without one, missed updates are really annoying, with one, you don’t even notice them that much.

    There was in my opinion nothing wrong with this chapter. I found the previous chapter a bit sudden, but luckily I only read that one today, so I could read this one immediately after.

  7. Hi Krest,

    You can find the RSS feed here, if that’s what you were asking.  I’m trying to get WR59 finished now.

    Chris.

  8. Showeda says:

    Tortured Artist . . . Great Writer . . . Tortured Artist . . . Great Writer . . . Tortured Artist . . . Great Writer . . . TORTURED ARTIST . . . GREAT WRITER . . . TTTTOOORRRTTTUUURRREEEDDD AAARRRTTTIIISSSTTT . . . GGGRRRREEEAAATTT WWWRRRIIITTTEEERRR . . . I think I’ve made my point . . . And btw, these last 2 pages, the perfect lull after the storming actions from previous.

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